cyus: (Torchwood)
cyus ([personal profile] cyus) wrote2009-08-07 10:10 am

Fic: "Pizza Mouth"

Title: Pizza Mouth
Pairing/Characters: Jack/Ianto
Rating: NC-17
Length: 5200 words
Summary: Jack and Ianto are having the date Ianto agreed to in the office building. The date leads to (admittedly messy) sex.
Notes: Thanks to [livejournal.com profile] 51stcenturyfox for the beta and to a number of people for suggestions. DVD commentary of this by [livejournal.com profile] blue_fjords can be found here.

They sat on chairs that weren't quite made for a generous work-out and tipped in a clack-clack from one leg to the other whenever they shifted their weight. Jack had been in Ianto's kitchen before, only not in a while, and this wasn't quite what he'd had in mind when he'd thought of a date. Clearly Ianto had, though. The pizza was sogging through the cardboard box by now, an hour later, the bottle of beer they were sharing was half-empty. Jack pushed the box to the side, thumbed at the greasy stain it left on the pressed wood of the 1980s style table. He leaned back, watched Ianto eat.

Ianto raised an eyebrow at Jack as he took a bite of the pizza, reached for the bottle to drink it down with beer. "What?" He wiped at his lips, greasy with tomato sauce and a piece of onion that Ianto caught with his tongue.

Jack shook his head. "Nothing."

The light from the lamp above the kitchen table was a little too bright for a romantic dinner. A group of mid-twenties walked past the window, their silhouettes visible as they passed by on the sidewalk, voices more than audible.

"Thought you'd said you wanted to fix the front garden," Jack said and nodded at the small patch of unevenly paved area to the sidewalk. "Make it preeetty." Jack grinned.

"Oi." Ianto balled up a greasy napkin and pitched it across the table. He took another bite of the pizza and barely swallowed it down when, "no time, really. Got aliens to catch with big guns." He grinned.

Jack raised an eyebrow, gave Ianto a laugh because it seemed appropriate. Funny how they hadn't done this before. Funny how he'd never really thought they would, or like this. He grabbed the bottle from Ianto's hand, smiled when Ianto's eyes flickered to the point of contact of their fingers touching, then up to his eyes, only to focus on his pizza again. Jack drank from the beer, tasting mostly pizza grease.

"I missed this," Jack said, turned the beer bottle on the table, then glanced up at Ianto, laughed. "That sounded more-"

"-yeah I was-"

"-anyway, nevermind." Jack took another pull from the bottle of beer, turned it to look at the label, the cheap stuff for 90p a bottle. He set it back on the table and pushed it across to Ianto. It scraped over the wood, wobbled a bit until Ianto stilled it with his fingertips.

"Still got your coat on," Ianto said after a moment, gestured with his wrist towards Jack.

"It's part of me, it's... mystical," Jack whispered and tried for the joke.

Ianto rolled his eyes. "You're such a poseur. Take it off, come on, Jack."

"Only if-" Jack reached across the table, brushed his fingers over the napkin stuffed into Ianto's shirt first, then reached under it for Ianto's tie and fumbled the tie out of its loop, pulled it off and dropped it on the table between them. He stood and shrugged out of his coat, let it slide between the back of the chair and his ass as he sat down again. "Better," he said, and raised his eyebrow at Ianto for confirmation.

Ianto nodded, reached under the napkin for the top button of his shirt and thumbed it open.

"You have..." Jack nodded, he gestured to Ianto's cheek and the tomato sauce that Ianto had brushed up there, "looks like blood though, very dramatic."

Ianto rolled his eyes, wiped the sauce off with the napkin and took another bite of the pizza, chewed slowly. Jack poked at the slices still on the cardboard. They were well on the way to cold now. He lifted a pepperoni slice and held it up to eye height, turned it around between his fingers, studying it.

"Alien, then?" Ianto asked.

"You're eating it," Jack pointed out, let the pepperoni drop back to the pizza. He leaned back on his chair, looked around the kitchen, from the kitchen through the front room out the window and from there the street. "Still didn't hang curtains. Thought you had to this century, and the one before and the next."

Ianto gestured with his pizza. "Not," he said, mouth full of pizza, "if you are under 30. It's the law."

"So I'd get to hang-"

"No."

"But I'm over-"

"No."

"But-"

"Not in my place, you don't." Ianto snorted laughter through the pizza in his mouth. He swallowed it down. "You can do it in the Hub. On second thought, no, don't do it in the Hub."

"I'd be allowed to," Jack said with a grin. "I'd make it preeetty in the Hub."

"Owen would have a ball."

Jack pulled a face. "Point taken." He mock-sighed, crossed his arms in front of his chest, watched Ianto, slice of pizza in one hand, thumb of the other idly playing with the mouth of the bottle of beer. "I'd sign the registry with you."

Ianto stopped chewing the pizza in his mouth and stared at Jack.

Jack looked up, shrugged again. "If that's, you know, what you-"

Ianto rolled his eyes as he caught himself. "Don't be a fucking idiot, Harkness," he said around the pizza and shoved the box across the table until it thumped into Jack's chest. "Stuff something in your mouth." Ianto shook his head, but there was a smile on his face, hidden around the bulged pizza cheeks and stretched lips from too big a bite to eat with your mouth fully closed.

Jack picked up a slice of cold pizza, bit off a bit and chewed it half-heartedly.

"That was a no," Ianto clarified when he could talk properly again. "Not that I don't- you get to fuck me anyway."

"I do?" Jack laughed and reached for the bottle of beer.

"Figuratively speaking." Ianto held up a hand, pizza dangling from it. "I'm still punishing you. So you get to suck me."

Jack stuck out his lower lip, hoping to look pathetic.

Ianto stared at the pizza in his hand, then Jack's shirt, and looked like he was contemplating the flight path, then just shook his head. "You know you love it," he said with a grin instead and reached for the bottle of beer that Jack was still holding.

"Hey," Jack said, not letting go.

"Hey what?"

"I was-"

"Too bad," Ianto said and plucked the bottle from Jack's hand, leaned back in his chair to sip it.

"I do like to suck your cock," Jack clarified as he stared at the ceiling. "And your ass."

"Eating," Ianto replied and pulled a face.

Jack shrugged.

"So you came back for my cock and my ass." Ianto smirked, eyed what was left of the slice of pizza, the crust and dangling bits of tomato sauced bottom and put it down on the cardboard box.

Jack looked at him, leaned forward, elbows on the table, fingers playing with the edges of cardboard, turning them up down again. "Yeah," he said.

Ianto took a pull from the beer, watched Jack, then grinned. "Good. It's a fine cock. It's bigger than-"

"It's not."

"Oh yes, it-"

"It's-"

Ianto raised his eyebrows, pointedly looked at his crotch, then at Jack.

"Shit," Jack said, and rubbed at his eyes, not that that was embarrassment.

Ianto grinned broadly, and Jack pitched the wadded up napkin back at Ianto's face, laughed when Ianto ducked out of the way and it bounced off the kitchen door. Ianto pushed back his chair a little, it scraped across the tiles. Jack looked at the pizza boxes, at Ianto, then stood from his chair and walked around the table until he stood in front of Ianto.

"Kiss me, yeah?" Ianto said, and Jack leaned down and did. Ianto tasted of pizza and beer, lips greasy.

Jack pulled away, swiping the back of his hand over his lips, then rubbed his hand on his trousers. "Pizza mouth."

Ianto rolled his eyes and reached for his napkin, cleaned his own lips, then pulled it off altogether and dropped it on the table. He was watching Jack and Jack was watching in return. Ianto spread his legs a little and Jack stepped between them, then dropped to his knees, placed his hands on Ianto's thigh and rubbed small circles over the fabric with his thumbs. He looked up at Ianto who was watching him.

Ianto's hips jerked upwards a little, Jack laughed. "That eager?"

"Shut up."

"Really?"

"Really."

Jack nodded and reached up to the waistband of Ianto's trousers, opened the belt, unfastened button and zip and parted his fly. He put his hand over Ianto's cock, touching him through the boxers, thumb rubbing back and forth.

Jack pressed a kiss to Ianto's bulge, shrugged. "I guess I did miss your cock." It really did say everything. He glanced at Ianto, then leaned down, stroked his fingertips from the base of Ianto's cock to the tip and mouthed the fabric stretched over the tip of Ianto's cock for a second, pulled a face and smacked his lips as he sat back a little.

"I showered," Ianto said.

"Yeah, this morning," Jack replied pointedly, then grinned. "Only fabric, sorry."

Ianto reached down and pulled his cock and balls out over the waistband of the boxershorts, gripped his cock and gave it two jerks. "Better?"

Jack nodded, grinning, and slipped his hand over Ianto's, lifted his cock and leaned down, pressing his lips to its side, then opened his mouth and drew it over Ianto's length. He settled in closer when Ianto let go off his cock and moved his hand to Jack's hair, played with the strands of gelled hair, intent to break the product out before he'd have come.

Jack chuckled against Ianto's cock, then set his lips to the tip and slowly moved his mouth down, tongue playing against the underside, pressing it up to his palate. Up again, and he let it slip out and mouthed along its length from tip to base, nuzzling into the hair of Ianto's crotch for a bit of playful porn before he had to laugh.

"You forgot the moaning," Ianto remarked from above.

"The- right." Jack play-moaned, his own hips moving in mock-arousal. He stopped to pluck pubic hair from his lips and brushed his fingers against Ianto's trousers to get rid of it.

"You aren't turned on, are you?" Ianto slipped his fingers through the strands of Jack's hair.

"It's a blowjob."

"Yeah, I wish," Ianto replied and pulled at Jack's hair to make his point.

Jack grinned and slipped his mouth back over Ianto's cock. He curled his fingers around the base and moved his mouth up and down in steady rhythm, saliva slipping from his lips and sliding over his fingers for cheap lube. He sucked in his cheeks, held just the head of Ianto's cock in his mouth and jerked him with his hand. He pulled off to wipe his lips on the sleeve of his shirt and idly jerked Ianto, watched the tip of Ianto's cock emerge from the foreskin, disappear again. He leaned down, pushed the foreskin up over the head with his fingers, sucked it between his lips, tried to get his tongue between head and foreskin until Ianto swatted at his head, and he relaxed the grip of his fingers just enough to move his hand up and down.

"You love it," Ianto said from above, and it was more wonder than anything.

Jack chuckled and swallowed Ianto again, pleased to feel him getting harder in his mouth. He slipped his cock deeper, then teased out his tongue to trace around the head, pursed his lips to suck at the spot just on the underside, before Ianto urged him back to get sucking proper, as he called it, and Jack was happy to oblige.

"You look good like this," Ianto said.

Jack pulled off Ianto's cock and looked up, wanked him with a slightly awkward rhythm, wet sounds of saliva between fingers and cock.

Ianto reached down and brushed his thumb over Jack's lips, brushed at the saliva on his chin. "Messy."

Jack grinned. "Happy." He used just thumb and fingertip to stroke Ianto from base to tip and back and Ianto pushed his hips into the motion, fucked the ring of Jack's fingers as they closed more fully in a loose grip.

Jack leaned down and mouthed Ianto's balls, sweaty and hairy, he laughed, making Ianto jerk, and wet with Jack's saliva. Ianto pushed Jack's hand away and jerked himself. Jack watched a moment then stuffed his hand into his own pants, squeezed himself inside briefs and trousers, as he licked at Ianto's balls, Ianto's cock hot against his cheek, the knuckles of Ianto's hand bumping awkwardly against cheekbone and eye with every stroke.

Jack reached up with his left hand, shifted Ianto's balls with his fingers, pushed them down to suck at taut skin. He tried to spit out the pubic hair that made it into his mouth but saliva coated it just ran down his chin and he stopped bothering.

Ianto was moaning above him and Jack pulled at his own cock in reaction.

"Fuck then?" Ianto said, stilling his motion and Jack sat back on his heels, jerked himself, waiting.

Ianto smiled down at Jack, twisted a little in the chair and pushed the tip of his cock against Jack's lips. Jack sucked the precome from Ianto's cock with an open-mouthed kiss, raised his eyebrows.

Ianto laughed, rolled his eyes. "Now you're playing the slut."

Jack grinned back. "I'm good at it. Bedroom then?" He pushed himself up, hand on the table.

Ianto nodded and stood. "I'll clean it away tomorrow," he said with a nod to the pizza box and the beer bottles.

"Not on my account," Jack laughed. "I love cold pizza."

"You love everything that is food," Ianto replied as he walked into the bathroom, rummaged in the drawer until he held up lube and condom.

"Eat when you can, is what they-"

Ianto swatted at him. "Whatever. Lose the shoes before you step on the carpet, yeah?" He walked ahead of Jack.

"Yes sir," Jack saluted and toed off his boots in the hallway, then began unbuttoning his shirt as he followed Ianto into the bedroom. "Fresh sheets?" he crossed the room to the bed and sniffed it, pulled a face.

"Do you see me complaining about your camp bed?"

Jack looked up pointedly.

Ianto grinned. "Point taken. I'll give them a wash tomorrow."

"We'll fuck in your sweat."

Ianto looked up from where he was shrugging out of his shirt, not even bothering to undo the buttons. He scratched a hand over his stomach. "Just pretend it's perfume."

"Well, I wouldn't want to fuck in perfume," Jack said, and stepped out of his trousers and briefs, pulled off his socks, then his t-shirt. He palmed his cock, drew his thumb over the head as he watched Ianto.

"Just shut it then, Harkness." Ianto stepped out of his trousers, pulled off his socks and boxershorts with them and crawled onto the bed, sprawling out, rubbing his face on a pillow before he rolled over and hugged the pillow to his chest.

"You are so sexy like that," Jack said and moved onto the bed himself. "Hey, did you shave your ass? Good times."

Ianto hit him with the pillow and turned around to Jack. "You know you'd hate it if I did," he raised his hand, "no I know you'd love to see me doing that. It's not happening. The agony of all that shit growing back," Ianto raised an eyebrow at Jack's snort, "only once and never again."

Ianto reached for Jack and pulled him down on top of him, kissed him, and Jack propped himself on one elbow and ran his hand over Ianto's chest, down his side, cock and balls and up again, rubbing his palm over Ianto's, well, pecs.

"Flabby bits," Jack whispered against Ianto's mouth.

Ianto pulled on Jack's hair in retaliation. "Small dick," he replied.

"Fuck off," Jack said, laughing and pushed his crotch against Ianto's hips, moved his hips for just the right amount of friction.

Ianto pulled away from the kiss to spit in his palm, then kissed Jack again, tongue and pizza taste, and moved his hand to Jack's cock, jerking him in time to the slow strokes of his tongue in Jack's mouth. Jack moved his leg over both of Ianto's, hitching himself further on top of Ianto and moved his fingers over Ianto's cock, palming its head.

Ianto nipped at Jack's lower lip, sucked it into his mouth and tickled at Jack's balls, pulled at the hair there with a chuckle when Jack's hips twitched and he could feel the frown in the kiss.

"Shift a bit," Ianto said.

Jack curled his body around Ianto and pushed up higher. Ianto moved his fingertips from Jack's balls to his ass, brushed his index finger over Jack's hole, then brought his fingers to his mouth to coat them with spit. Before he could move them down again Jack had caught them between his lips and was sucking on them, eyes closed.

Ianto blinked up at him, cock hardening in the grip Jack still had it in. Jack grinned around the fingers and released them, glanced up at Ianto, self-satisfied. Ianto slipped the fingers down between their bodies and settled the tips of them against Jack's hole, tracing them around the clenched muscle.

"How clean are-" Ianto started.

"I didn't shower," Jack said, rolling his eyes. "D'uh," he added.

Ianto looked up, laughing. "You said, 'd'uh'."

"I do watch the telly, Ianto. I live in this century, hello."

Ianto rolled his eyes.

"Just don't think about it and get to it. You have to wash the sheets any-"

"Don't."

Jack grinned and pushed his ass against Ianto's fingers. Ianto grinned back, more exasperated than anything, and pushed one saliva-slickened finger into Jack's ass, smiled when Jack's moan made it past his lips. He moved his finger in and out slowly, fucking tease. He kissed Jack's open lips, slipped his tongue in and drew it over Jack's, drew it along teeth, slowly fucking Jack with one finger then two. Jack moved his hips into the motion, pushed his hardening cock against Ianto's hips then back onto his fingers.

"Nipples," Jack muttered.

"Greedy bastard," Ianto replied, but moved his free hand to Jack's nipples and rolled them between thumb and index fingers, squeezed them a little.

Jack moaned again. The sound had slipped out, but he was hardly embarrassed. He'd missed this, a little like an addict who could only get one fix. A bit pathetic, maybe, but it was what it was.

"Lube?" Ianto asked, pulled his fingers from Jack's ass and wiped them on the sheets.

"Shit, you're stopping now?" Jack sprawled back on the bed, stared at Ianto.

"Yeah, I want to get my cock in there."

Jack shrugged. "I like the fingers. Or your mouth."

"Dream on. You'll like the cock, too. Promise." Ianto stretched over Jack's body for the lube and rubber on the bedside table.

Jack grinned, enjoying the view. He hesitated for just a moment before he tickled under Ianto's arms, sweat-soaked armpits and down his sides, up his ribs again. He held Ianto close with one hand, tickled him with the other.

Ianto thumped down hard onto Jack's body, elbow digging into Jack's stomach, hand flailing for Jack's face.

"Fucking hell," Ianto exclaimed as he broke free from the hold and struggled away to the other side of the bed.

Jack was laughing, rubbing his skin where Ianto's elbow had presumably punctured something vital (not really), and grinned at the indignation on Ianto's face. "Couldn't resist," Jack said.

Ianto heaved a sigh and uncapped the lube, squeezed a little on his fingers and slathered it over his cock. "You are such a child."

Jack laughed, pushed himself on his elbows. "I love your cock," he said and cocked his head at Ianto's slow jerking movements.

"How much?" Ianto asked, eyebrows raised.

"Enough to have you fuck me," Jack offered. "That means, a lot. I love it a lot."

"That isn't flattery."

"No?"

Ianto fumbled at the condom wrapper with lube wet hands then threw it to Jack. Jack wiped it on his chest, and ripped open, squeezed the condom out. "No, it's 'Jack Harkness wants cock'."

"Aw, but you are special," Jack replied as he crawled across the bed to Ianto. He pressed a kiss to Ianto's lubed cock. "Because you are so big."

"Wanker." Ianto grabbed the condom from Jack's fingers and rolled it over his cock. "Get to it, we have to be up by six."

Jack laughed, rolled his eyes and turned over onto hands and knees, pushing out his ass to Ianto. "You are such a romantic."

"You're not fucking me because I'm a romantic."

Jack shook his head. "Nah, I love you because you're not."

Ianto stopped mid-movement, lube dribbling from the tube when Jack looked over his shoulder. Jack raised his eyebrows, nodded at the lube.

Ianto caught the lube on his fingertips and set the tube on the bed. "Really?" He slathered the lube over Jack's hole and stuck two fingers in, pulled them out to gather more lube and pushed them in again, fucking him slowly.

"Yeah," Jack said, and it was true enough.

"Cool, I guess," Ianto replied. He reached for the lube with his left and and squeezed out more around his fingers in Jack's ass, fucked it in slowly then stole some to slather over the condom.

"Okay," Jack replied and pushed his ass back against Ianto's fingers. "Get to it, will you? Feed me your big, studly cock."

Ianto laughed and pulled his fingers from Jack's ass, curled them around the base off his cock. He placed his left hand on jack's hip, urged him down a little. He rubbed the tip of his cock over Jack's hole. "Relax, will you," he muttered, pinching Jack's ass cheek, then pushed his hips forward, waiting, pushing until Jack gave a little and he pushed inside.

"Oh, I'm so tight," Jack groaned in porn-star voice, but pushed back against Ianto.

"Shut up," Ianto laughed behind him, pulled out a little and pushed in again, then let go off his cock and moved the second hand to Jack's hip.

"Oh yeah, give it to me, baby," Jack said, rocking his hips, then shut up when Ianto slowly slid inside until his balls were pushed against Jack's ass. Jack exhaled, inhaled, then rocked back against Ianto, grinned when Ianto's moan was entirely unplayed and very very real. "I do love you, you know," Jack said.

Ianto pulled out just a little and pushed in again, as if he wanted to get as close to Jack as he could.

"You're the moon and the stars and-"

Ianto pulled out and pushed into Jack again, just hard enough to steal his breath and the cheap platitudes. Jack smiled into the pillow he'd grabbed for himself and spread his knees a little further.

Jack's ass squelched with wetness, cracking up Jack first, then Ianto, but he pushed back and let Ianto fuck him through the laughter.

"I like fucking you," Ianto said, as he set a faster rhythm, grunted it through pushes and pulls into Jack's body. "You don't think of the universe when I fuck you."

Jack reached down for his cock, jerked himself, kept himself balanced on shoulder and elbow and face, breathing Ianto's night sweat from the pillow. He didn't quite have it in him to say that he was always thinking of the universe.

"Harder, would you?" Jack grunted.

"You are such a slut."

"Oi, mate," Jack said, trying for Ianto's voice when he was talking to one of the locals.

Ianto slapped him on the ass, but fucked him harder, pressed Jack's back deeper towards the mattress to raise his ass, and fucked him like Jack had never been gone. Moans slipped out on every exhale, sharp hissing on the inhale, and Jack enjoyed the odd jolt the fuck sent up his spine when Ianto managed to hit the rhythm just right for a stroke or two and lost it again when he got lost in his own pleasure.

Jack squeezed his fingers around his own cock. "C'mon, Ianto," he murmured, "you are so fucking hot." And it wasn't the porn talk now.

Ianto pulled at Jack's thigh and stretched him out flat and half on his side, slipped out briefly and pushed his cock back inside as he pushed one of Jack's knees to his chest, then shifted up onto one elbow, fucked him in hard strokes despite the awkward angle. Ianto's thigh was wet were it was stuck to Jack's. Jack moved his hand, now half-buried under his body, jerked himself in time to Ianto's thrusts into his ass.

"You could ride me," Ianto suggested, half-laughing as he leaned forward, hands on either side of Jack's body still leaning mostly sideways, tried for a different angle into Jack's ass.

Jack moaned, pushed back onto Ianto's cock. Just like this. "No thanks."

"Not in the mood?"

"Too old."

"Pull the other one," Ianto said.

Jack reached behind his balls, fingertips fumbling for Ianto's, then touching the rim of his hole where Ianto was pushing into him.

"Fucking hell," Ianto said, and pushed his cock in deeper, squeezing Jack's fingers between crotch and ass on every down stroke. Jack grinned, tried to get a grip around Ianto's cock but couldn't quite get there.

"Fuck," Ianto pulled out of Jack's ass, and turned him over, hand hard on Jack's hip.

Jack laughed and pulled his knees up, slid them over Ianto's shoulders and choked a little on his laugh when Ianto entered him again in one long thrust, leaned forward and pushed into him with short, jabbing thrusts.

The bed rocked into the wall, once, twice and Ianto swore under his breath, making Jack laugh, making Ianto curse harder as he forced himself deeper.

"Fucking take it," Ianto forced out between his teeth, and Jack did, jerking himself, rubbing his thumb over his balls.

"You're so sexy," Jack said, and watched the sweat on Ianto's face and down his chest, the hair from chest to navel to crotch, muscles tightening under skin and he reached up and brushed his hand over Ianto's face, down his chest and stomach. "I love you," Jack said.

"Fucking idiot," Ianto replied and hung his head as he thrust harder, deeper, rhythm getting erratic, shorter, lost and he pushed deep, once, twice and held himself there as his hips twitched against Jack's ass, as he came.

Ianto let himself drop forward, pushed Jack's legs off his shoulders and caught himself on his elbows leaning over Jack. Jack drew one hand up and down Ianto's back, over his ass and back up to his neck and pulled him down for a kiss, then buried his face in Ianto's neck as he jerked himself harder, hid his moans in Ianto's skin.

Ianto laughed, a chuckle in his chest. "Let me." And he scooted down, pulled a face when his cock pulled free of Jack's ass. "Wait," he said, stilling Jack with a hand on his chest, then pulled the condom off his cock and tried to tie it like a pro with slippery fingers, gave up and just dropped it on the bed next to them.

He knelt between Jack's legs, pushed Jack's hand out of the way and licked a slow line from Jack's balls to the tip of his cock, then lowered his mouth and repeated the same with hot breath and wet lips, sucking kisses along the vein until he took Jack's cock into his mouth from the tip and sucked him down, bopped his head a little. Jack pushed his hips up, forced his cock deeper into Ianto's mouth. His hand strayed to Ianto's hair, held him as he fucked his mouth with shallow thrusts. Ianto was taking it, tightening his lips and sucking.

Ianto's fingers slipped to Jack's balls, rolling them in the palm of his hand and from there to Jack's hole. He pushed two fingers in and fucked them in and out, well-lubed as he sucked Jack, like he hadn't done in too long.

"Coming soon," Jack said through clenched teeth, watching.

Ianto nodded, took him down to the root, Jack's cock just a mouthful, a few more times, then pulled off and wanked him with his hand. Jack felt his body tighten under the strokes, hips pushing up, balls tighten, and he came over Ianto's hand, dripped over his stomach. The breath released from his chest in a low moan when Ianto squeezed out his come, slow stroke from base to tip. His hips jerked and Jack laughed when Ianto did.

Jack reached down and stilled Ianto's hand on his cock. Ianto shrugged and lifted his hand off, stared at it for a moment then wiped it on Jack's chest, propped himself on his elbow. Jack was watching him through slitted eyes, enjoying the seconds of post-orgasm euphoria, then shifted up on his elbows, too. Lube was wet between his cheeks, he wriggled on the sheets, finally had to reach down and wipe at it.

"Ew," Ianto said.

"Shut up," Jack replied, chuckling.

"Itchy much?"

"You have no idea." Jack slipped back down to lie flat on the mattress, head nicely pillowed, and wiped his fingers on the sheets.

"Well I was going to change them in morning," Ianto said.

Jack laughed. "Just a bit of lube and-"

"No thanks," Ianto replied and rolled off the bed. He scratched at his cock, drying lube and come. "You take a shower first and I change the sheets?"

Jack shrugged and with a long sigh slid off the bed to stand. He looked down himself over his shoulder, pulled his ass cheeks apart. "I'm not dripping, am I?"

Ianto threw a pillow at him. "Get going."

"You'll join me?"

"I don't think you've forgotten the size of my shower while you-" Ianto broke off, then rolled his eyes. "You'll only complain."

"I'm good at complaining." Jack hadn't forgotten. That was something.

Jack walked out of the bedroom, hesitated at the bathroom door then took a quick detour to the kitchen and grabbed a slice of cold pizza and the warm beer. He stood, leaned against the doorframe of the bedroom and watched Ianto.

"That what you call a shower?"

"No, pizza," Jack replied and took a bite of the pizza. "See," he added while chewing.

Ianto walked over and grabbed the beer from Jack's hand, drank. Ianto's cock was rubbing against Jack's, and they both looked down at the same moment.

"See, I'm bigger," Ianto said, triumph in his voice.

Jack pushed the pizza at Ianto chest and turned to walk into the bathroom. "I'm taking a shower."

"You know you love me," Ianto called after him.

Jack grinned. Yeah, he knew.


(Timestamp Fic Toast Crumbs, the morning after)

[identity profile] topgeargirl2.livejournal.com 2009-08-07 10:26 am (UTC)(link)
This was very good. very interesting and hot at the same time.

It reminded me that I forget to include a condom every time I write sex scenes between those two.

[identity profile] cyus.livejournal.com 2009-08-08 09:54 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you very much! The condom was a bit of a, yeah, maybe a play on a lot of sex scenes not including it. That said, I'm certainly not one of those who thinks it's an extreme faux-pas if the two of them fuck without a condom. I think there are enough things in place that could make it okay especially if they are monogamous and get tested regularly etc., so really i wouldn't worry overly much. But in general, yup, promoting safe sex, I think it's a good thing so I'm all for that

[identity profile] lefaym.livejournal.com 2009-08-07 12:39 pm (UTC)(link)
From you, this is positively fluffy! ;)

Seriously, though, I love it. Very realistic without sacrificing affection or sexiness.

[identity profile] cyus.livejournal.com 2009-08-08 09:58 pm (UTC)(link)
Isn't it just, I know. I had a great time writing it, surprisingly to me, because, well, it's not like I don't write fluff based on some principles or anything, I don't write fluff because writing it would bore me. That is why this story is what it is, with the dialogue, with the mess, with the sex scenes, with the small hints at underlying darknesses, because this way it kept me more than entertained. I said in other places that it was like writing comfort food, because the interpretations are ones drawn with such gentle lines, but it's still comfort food that's interesting to me as a writer.

Glad you love it, because I like a whole lot, too. More than I quite expected, I think.

Thanks for the comment
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[identity profile] spiderine.livejournal.com 2009-08-07 01:53 pm (UTC)(link)
I LOVE YOUR ICON.

...any chance I could use it? I give good credit! *bats eyelashes*
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[identity profile] tayla36.livejournal.com 2009-08-07 01:20 pm (UTC)(link)
this is great.

Real Guy Sex.

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[identity profile] doctorinchains.livejournal.com 2009-08-07 01:26 pm (UTC)(link)
How refreshing! Some hot action between the two but with some realism. I like how you managed to incorporate the realities of sex (bodily fluids, odors and such) in a humourous and totally believable way, without sacrificing the erotic tension between the two. I also really liked the comfort and banter between the two. I know the topic of 'whether Ianto knew Jack loved him' has been beaten to death, but it's nice to read a fic where Ianto is confident of Jack's affection. Thanks for a great read!

[identity profile] cyus.livejournal.com 2009-08-08 10:05 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you. I'm glad you still see erotic tension between them because I'm not sure I entirely do (and then, it was never intended to be a PWP when I started writing it, and even after, so I'm a little flabbergasted it is technically one now, I suppose).

But yeah, the dialogue and interactions, they are rooted in the assumption of the characters being comfortable with one another and know one another well, where it's easy to relax and goof around and not worry about clean sheets and showering. And well, sex is fun, I think that is what I wanted to show. That sex isn't the mechanical act that follows if you really like someone because readers expect it in a fic, especially a Jack/Ianto, but that it is genuine funny and a bit absurd and ridiculous at times.

Given I usually write Jack and Ianto a little at odds with where tehy stand with one another it was a refreshing change to write them like this in this story, and I'm glad to hear that that worked for you.

[identity profile] lawsontl.livejournal.com 2009-08-07 01:34 pm (UTC)(link)
I repeat what I said to the early version: messy and real, weirdly loving yet affectionately bitter, and very BOY (guess you'd know, being one and all). And today shall go down in history as the day you publicly posted the schmoopiest thing you've ever written.

But I have one quibble I hadn't thought of: dude, cheap beer? On a date? C'mon Ianto! Pizza, sure (pizza is always good), but decent beer. Or is he really THAT honked off at Jackie boy? *grin*

This may yet wind up my .sig somewhere: "Hey, did you shave your ass? Good times."

[identity profile] cyus.livejournal.com 2009-08-08 10:09 pm (UTC)(link)
Haha, I KNOW! It's so sweet and aww-inducing, I'm quite surprised still by myself producing this. I think it's still ME enough in the little twists and well, I suppose in the honesty and the camera-guidances, in a way, so that's cool.

No-one spends money on expensive beer. It's beer, dude! Still gotta buy chips and stuff.

And heh, that would be an awesome icon.

Thanks for the comment, and also for the earlier comment and suggestions and stuff. I think some of that got incorporated somehow.

[identity profile] neifile7.livejournal.com 2009-08-07 01:54 pm (UTC)(link)
It's a lot of fun to go back and read this after seeing hope's very apposite comments. I also don't see this as a deconstruction of slash clichés; mocking porn gently (and I do think it's gentle here) is also an aspect of sex as we live it, the distance between fantasies that we consume and the real physical experience in all its imperfect glory. Personally, I find that awareness sexy in itself, not in a wank!fic sense but as a measure of the joy and affection that can be found in connecting two bodies. So for me this gets at something that I think fluff also aims for, even if the means are different.

What comes through most strongly for me, with this as the backdrop, is the real intimacy that is specific to these two characters, that's about familiarity and comfort and things that come easily to them (and that they've both missed). Just about everything else we know about them is fraught and difficult, but this isn't. And I think that it's entirely IC that it should actually mean a lot to Jack, and give Ianto the kind of confidence we see here. Both of them spend a lot of canonical time trying to be perfect in one difficult way or another; it's a pleasure seeing them strip all that off, finding ways to be playful and mess each other around and just feel.

"You know you love me" -- that's something people usually say when they're crossing a line or pushing a boundary. Maybe it's that here, too, but it's also the literal truth. I love how convincingly you put that across.

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[identity profile] cyus.livejournal.com 2009-08-09 07:12 pm (UTC)(link)
Certainly there was a slight teasing edge involved during the writing of this, the curtains bit wouldn't be in if not for that, but it was never intended as meta-commentary even if it possibly works like that. The inclusion of the stereotypical porn talk for a joke was only that, a joke between Jack and Ianto, them making fun of porn, not really a narrative/meta choice from me, even though certainly it can be seen as that. What I did want to bring across was definitely two people just enjoying themselves, laughing and having fun and being intimate with one another.

Writing comment replies I used the term "camera angle" a lot because I think it is a good one to describe what I usually do in fic, which is to use very unforgiving camera angles and I use the same here, but in this context it highlights the intimacy rather than highlighting the ugly edges BECAUSE they are so comfortable with one another. In a way thsi does feel like a very safe space for them, and it was enjoyable for me to write it and not write the other side of them that I usually highlight. As I said somewhere, it's a bit like comfort food.

As for the "You know you love me", it's something you can only say if you are utterly confident in the other person's love, I think, something you would never say playfully if you had any doubts, and for me that is what comes across in this. This story isn't just about them fucking, this one is about them in a serious relationship and with that, a huge change from my regular stuff.

Thanks for the comment here, and the ones on the original draft. Appreciate it, like always.

[identity profile] eternalwings.livejournal.com 2009-08-07 02:03 pm (UTC)(link)
Uh that was amazing, realistic and great because sex is never the clean and sterilized action people normally write. Well done!

[identity profile] cyus.livejournal.com 2009-08-08 05:43 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you very much. That was definitely the idea, to write something that isn't sterilized but just normal and relaxed and low-stress sex between two people that have fun in bed, so I'm glad to hear it worked for you. Thanks for the comment, I appreciate it.

[identity profile] taffimai.livejournal.com 2009-08-07 02:31 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh! They had real sex! Like men!

Porn sex gets boring after a while. Not to mention the utter bore of romance novel sex. This is good stuff, though.

[identity profile] cyus.livejournal.com 2009-08-08 05:50 pm (UTC)(link)
You won't ever find me being down on porn sex! I watch that stuff, but yeah, I agree about romance novel sex, mostly because that's not my scene and I can't relate to it, and that's why this came around. No idea if it's sexy, I didn't write it to be sexy, only to write sex in a way that feels more real to me, personally.

So hey, glad you liked it. Appreciate the comment.
ext_41651: Ianto shiny with mobile (Day four)

[identity profile] fide-et-spe.livejournal.com 2009-08-07 03:11 pm (UTC)(link)
I have so much love for this! I always like your writing, and I get that it is almost fluffy for you. However it is very real, very dirty but manages to be playful and erotic at the same time. Yay for realistic sex. Jack and Ianto are very in character here, well in character for this point in season two at least. Jack can be needy and sentimental, and Ianto secure and in charge. Hey that is canon after all.

[identity profile] cyus.livejournal.com 2009-08-08 10:15 pm (UTC)(link)
I think it is an interesting incorporation of what I do in virtually all of my stories (dirtyness, honesty, rather unforgiving camera angles) with elements that I don't ordinarily use (humor, dialogue, loads and loads of dialogue, and the basis of a comfortable relationship), and it turns into this strange little interesting THING that manages to avoid being harsh but is still honest. As I described it in my regular journal, it's like a Swedish indie film with a handcamera and occasional audio commentary from Jack. Given I wrote it in 3-4 hours in one swoop (then edited for syntax/grammar etc), I'm extremely pleased with this THING because it is a direction I haven't taken my writing before and I think it still works.

It is, yeah, I think an interpretation of Jack that works, clearly not the only one that works, but I like this one. And I like that a lot of the security in Ianto here comes from Jack being this open with what he feels. It's good. I like them I like this.

Thanks for commenting, appreciate it a lot, and happy to hear you enjoyed it as someone who knows my other writing.

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[identity profile] teaboyfan.livejournal.com 2009-08-07 03:15 pm (UTC)(link)
In case I haven't said it explicitly yet, you are an awesome writer and storyteller.

[identity profile] cyus.livejournal.com 2009-08-08 05:51 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you very much, I appreciate it.

Aw man, your icon, his little eyebrows.

Anyway, thanks for the comment :)
ext_47484: (Jack/Ianto)

[identity profile] marita-c.livejournal.com 2009-08-07 03:16 pm (UTC)(link)
I loved this! I think you kind of grabbed Jack and Ianto and dragged them out of Torchwood, and not just physically, so that for a little while they were just two ordinary guys. But then we have these wonderful bits to remind us:
""I like fucking you," ... "You don't think of the universe when I fuck you." ... He didn't quite have it in him to say that he was always thinking of the universe. ..."
While Ianto can be viewed by some as just an ordinary guy, Jack is anything but.

And this:
"You're so sexy," Jack said, and watched the sweat on Ianto's face and down his chest, the hair from chest to navel to crotch, muscles tightening under skin and he reached up and brushed his hand over Ianto's face, down his chest and stomach. "I love you," Jack said.

I don't know why, but for some reason it struck me as sad rather than fluffy or romantic, which is why I liked it so much.

[identity profile] cyus.livejournal.com 2009-08-08 11:15 pm (UTC)(link)
I can see where the melancholic touch comes from and I did picture Jack with a small, crooked slightly sad smile in that scene, Ianto oblivious and Jack just enjoying that moment while it's there. I don't think Jack is someone who dwells on it or who can allow himself to dwell on that, but I can see it in that moment, yes. That's the kind of Jack that could say "You're beautiful" and break people's hearts. It's a very private and intimate moment for Jack, I think, and a quiet moment despite the action, so I'm actually really happy you picked that one out because it's one of my favorite ones in the story.

And yeah, you know, I think Jack enjoys playing the ordinary guy and play him as good as possible for Ianto and also for himself, but fact is certainly that he just isn't.

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[identity profile] lucy-locket.livejournal.com 2009-08-07 03:40 pm (UTC)(link)
Wow, that was dirty! ;) I love it!

It may sound weird but one of the things I love about this is the fact that they actually laugh and joke around during the sex. Because sex is rather silly most of the time really :p I especially loved the running joke about their dick sizes, because it's something I could really see them doing. I can actually see John and Gareth acting it and lol @ my mind. I'm a much naughtier girl than I may appear ;)

[identity profile] cyus.livejournal.com 2009-08-08 11:07 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh that is TOTALLY what I was going for aside from the angle of 'this is the dirty, sweaty mess of sex' the fact that sex is fun and enjoyable and that you laugh about the stupidest things because something always goes wrong, and that in this case people have it who are comfortable with one another and comfortable enough and secure enough in each other's affections to joke and relax and enjoy themselves, so yeah, good to hear that that came across.

And hah, I'd pay them to act this, just not sure they'd do it for ten bucks. :P

[identity profile] curriejean.livejournal.com 2009-08-07 03:48 pm (UTC)(link)
Holy hell, even long before they left the kitchen, I was mumbling to myself about how natural and alive your writing is. This really, really stands out. The banter, and all the little imperfections in the act make this not seem like fiction, more like a creatively embellished transcript of a very real evening. Well done!
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[identity profile] cyus.livejournal.com 2009-08-08 11:05 pm (UTC)(link)
I described it elsewhere as a Swedish indie docu film, filmed with a handheld camera, maybe in black and white, with occasional audio commentary from Jack Harkness. I think that kind of, for me, in review, it has that kind of feel for me, and I'm surprised myself it quite turned into this. Very glad to hear you say that it feels natural and alive to you. My beta told me, "you know, this is humor, that dialogue, that's humor," and I was like, "wait, it is?" because I don't DO humor and this, to me, was just writing people as they talk, as they would interact, so I'm glad it does come across as that.

Thank you very much for your comment, I appreciate it.

[identity profile] kel-reiley.livejournal.com 2009-08-07 04:06 pm (UTC)(link)
o, you posted it! wow :D
i'm unoriginal, so i can't think of anything that hasn't already been said
but this:
"I love you," Jack said.

"Fucking idiot," Ianto replied


and the laughing and the banter, it's light but still with an undercurrent of raw emotion

[identity profile] cyus.livejournal.com 2009-08-08 05:53 pm (UTC)(link)
Thanks! It's all based on the idea that they are comfortable with one another, in their emotions, in their physical and verbal interactions. This wouldn't work without that premise, so am glad you enjoyed it. The dialogue was fun to write. And also thanks for apparently reccing this to someone else, I appreciate that.

THANKS KEL! :D

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[identity profile] amand-r.livejournal.com 2009-08-07 04:26 pm (UTC)(link)
Haaaaahahahahahaa. I hope you are held down and fellated by a bunch of angry fangirls.

I love this fic leik burning.

[identity profile] cyus.livejournal.com 2009-08-08 05:54 pm (UTC)(link)
Dude, can you read my mind? It didn't happen yet, and here I was sitting with my pants down all night.

Thanks for the love, I can feel it through the computer screen. Sizzzzle.

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[identity profile] 51stcenturyfox.livejournal.com 2009-08-07 05:01 pm (UTC)(link)
Dirty, dirty boy.

You already know I like this! :D

Edited for appropriate icon. PIZZA.
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[identity profile] cyus.livejournal.com 2009-08-08 05:56 pm (UTC)(link)
HAHA. Aww Gwen, man.

THANKS FOR THE BETA! NOTE THE BETA CREDIT!!!

[identity profile] rexluscus.livejournal.com 2009-08-07 05:03 pm (UTC)(link)
Aw, I love that you gave Ianto saggy tits. <3

Also, I love how often Jack says "I love you" and Ianto doesn't say it back. There are two ways one could write Jack - as someone who really has trouble with that word, and as someone who really doesn't - and I kind of think he doesn't. I mean, really - Jack falls in love all the time. Love doesn't always have to be LOVE, whatever that means. Ianto's the one for whom that word has baggage, I think.

I love the greasy, squelchy, giggly, hairy messiness of this. Ianto with his nasty sheets. Jack checking between his ass cheeks. Yep, bodies are kinda gross and fun.

[identity profile] cyus.livejournal.com 2009-08-08 10:21 pm (UTC)(link)
I had to, just because he does, a little, probably, and because he's still awesome.

I have, I probably have written Jack the other way before. I have certainly written him with more issues in relation to Ianto, and their relationship as a lot less secure, Ianto as a lot less secure in Jack's affection for him than he is here, so I can see that, but I like this interpretation of Jack, because I agree, I see Jack as someone who loves and who is fine saying it because, I think, he's caught on over time that it makes people feel loved. I don't mean that in a manipulative way but more that he strikes me as someone who, while seeing people pass and pass away, wants to make them feel happy and loved and secure while they are alive. That is this Jack (how that doesn't quite fit with CoE, let's not discuss that here but I'm sure I could explain that SOMEHOW). And clearly, I mean, Ianto isn't the first and Ianto won't be the last and yeah, no, I do like this Jack.

And glad you like the sex. Sex is fun and sex is awkward and you laugh about it when it's awkward, and people joke, and yeah, in a way I wanted to show some honest enjoyment and joy through and during sex, rather than just sex, so glad you did enjoy that.

Thanks for the comment, I appreciate it.

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[identity profile] shane-mayhem.livejournal.com 2009-08-07 05:06 pm (UTC)(link)
haha! I think it's fluffy! I also like that their conversation is practically unintelligible...it's like they're both talking in their own separate universes and the words only intersect at certain times, like a Venn diagram...:D

[identity profile] cyus.livejournal.com 2009-08-08 06:00 pm (UTC)(link)
See, I thought it was fluffy also. I mean, they like each other and all!, but apparently fluff is, I don't know, something else, but yeah, I figure they are just talking the way you talk, you know, with one another. Rarely anyone sits down to have a conversation in paragraphs, so that is what I had them do, just talk and indeed, towards the end they are working hard to keep their little shared conversation space and not each lose themselves in their own head, but yeah, glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for stopping by for a comment, appreciate that.

[identity profile] sierraalpha.livejournal.com 2009-08-07 05:17 pm (UTC)(link)
Wow, how much do I love this fic! Brilliant writing, great characterisation but I mostly love it because it's so 'real'. A refreshing change from the sterilised kind of sex in most fics. Have you written other Jack/Ianto fics? I must go read them if so.

Looking forward to your next one.... *crosses fingers for a next one*

[identity profile] cyus.livejournal.com 2009-08-08 06:04 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you very much for the comment. The idea to write non-sterilized sex, it wasn't even that deliberate, originally I didn't even mean to put sex in. I'm almost afraid to say that this is probably more or less how I'd write sex (which is to say, I don't usually write porn).

I have, hmm, I have written what would be somehow Jack/Ianto but nothing that is necessarily this shippy, I'm afraid, nothing that has them this close and this loving with one another even, so in those terms it was an experiment, but feel free to browse through my list of fanfic here: http://cyus.livejournal.com/2001.html to see if you enjoy other things I've written.

Thanks again.
ext_41770: Daleks (Torchwood - Jack wants to do YOU)

[identity profile] electro-club.livejournal.com 2009-08-07 06:22 pm (UTC)(link)
Crap, I don't have a lot of time to comment now. But this is really awesome. I don't think it's fluff, or maybe you just created a whole new concept of fluff. Like a subgroup or something. You can name it after you, like crue-fluff.

Like everyone before me said, it was very real, and that was brilliant. There were parts when I was seriously ewwing, and that was awesome. You've made them almost two existing people, and that is something very hard to achieve even in the most well written pieces out there. I do love your style, and your stories, and here you've done something slightly different, but keeping faithful to the nude and crude side of what you do. This is the commercial crue, and it's just as good.

The dialogues were fantastic! I'm a dialogue whore, really. And yours were made of pure, pure awesome. I'd talk more about it, but someone before me probably already did, and I have to run.

Anyway, loved it. :) Bad I don't have time to think it over or find more interesting/important things to comment, but it was lovely, on a very nasty, messy, real, weird sort of way. It only makes me love your writing skills more. I shall read the discussion at your journal too, heard it was made of win.

[identity profile] cyus.livejournal.com 2009-08-09 07:29 pm (UTC)(link)
I think I adapted things from your comment and put them in a few comment replies here because I agree. I always use what I started to refer to as "unforgiving camera angles" in fiction, to highlight details, and highlight usually the uglier sides, and slightly hidden sides, and the same happens here, I try to avoid filtering anything through filters but try to be, honest, I suppose, maybe leaning towards crude in that way and an overly sharp portrayal. In this, I think it works towards the intimacy, when it usually works against it, and that was a bit of an interesting experience for me, to write something that simply starts from a different premise and to still play with my usual tools

And, you know, add a few, because dialogue isn't naturally a strength, so I'm really happy to hear it worked out this well in this one. I certainly went a lot lighter on the narrative than I usually do.

Thank you for taking the time to comment, I appreciate it, and glad to hear you enjoyed it.

[identity profile] shadowedkit.livejournal.com 2009-08-07 11:13 pm (UTC)(link)
Man the only thing I could think of after this was Aww.

Its real, I love the intimacy, banter and just the comfortableness (that is a word for the moment :P) of them just being together and having sex. You had me eewing at bits, and laughing at the dialogue- it was amusing- the size jokes were funny and I think you might be the first writer to ever call Ianto's pec flabby lol.

I'm amused at Ianto wanting pizza and beer (cheap at that!) for a date- yea pizza and beer is supposedly cheesy, but its real , and you'know, most people often have the two together when they are over to hang out. What happens after happens. THANKYOU for not making them become horny over damn pizza, and the way one of them eats the pizza. Seriously.

To sum up- there is raw emotion- it felt like they said alot in between everything, its intimate and its messy and real. Aww, you're awesome :D

[identity profile] cyus.livejournal.com 2009-08-08 11:01 pm (UTC)(link)
You very much sum up what I wanted to do with this fic, and what kept me entertained writing this when I did, the dialogue, the honesty in the body descriptions, a few of the jokes that I never thought of as jokes until someone said, "look, this is humor."

So I'm really glad to hear all these things works in this combination and that they made people feel good (may be the first time I do that with a fic, I'm proud)

Haven't even considered (amongst the cliches I played with) that there are fics where one of them gets horny watching the other suck on a piece of pizza but yeah, that certainly wouldn't have occurred to me. That's kinda weird. Eew. Foodsex.

And well, this is certainly in keeping with my regular characterization of Ianto as someone who is not overly sophisticated and posh when he doesn't need to be, and I don't think he needs to be for Jack.

So yup! Thanks very much for your comment, I did want to show that they are comfortable and that they are intimate and this story wouldn't work if they weren't, so am glad that all that comes across. Thank you very much for your comment. :)

[identity profile] monikkk.livejournal.com 2009-08-07 11:13 pm (UTC)(link)
what everyone says:> this rocks. realistic and hot:)

[identity profile] cyus.livejournal.com 2009-08-08 06:07 pm (UTC)(link)
Thanks very much! Glad to hear you enjoyed it. And that it was hot, really, never quite sure when something actually comes across as hot.

[identity profile] mrsalemp.livejournal.com 2009-08-08 12:14 am (UTC)(link)
Can't speak for everyone, but I think this was a great on to post on ninjateaboy. I liked it for so many reasons, it was messy but in the best possible way (like I didn't need the warning, but can see where some might). I would say its real, but I can only say that it's real as far as I can imagine, as I have no actual relevent experience to offer lol
It made me happy, I now have a stupid smile on my face. Hope you're pleased with yourself :P

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I also can't spell - great one to post on ninjateaboy

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[identity profile] alba17.livejournal.com 2009-08-08 03:04 am (UTC)(link)
Hmmm, loved it. Seemed very real. Loved the dialogue and very hot. The little touches about messiness were funny.

Jack's cock just a mouthful hehehe

[identity profile] cyus.livejournal.com 2009-08-08 06:17 pm (UTC)(link)
I had to include the 'small cock for Jack' simply because this other story I have that I'll have to clean up has Ianto having a small cock, so, you know, I figured that it was Jack's turn this time, and I do like how it worked out in the story, that he doesn't really care, essentially, because obviously, it's cool.

Glad to hear you enjoyed the dialogue (considering I don't consider myself much of a dialogue writer) and the sexy bits. Thanks for the comment

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