You write the least fluffy fluff ever but it ring so much more true due to the realistic part of the story and strong characterisation.
With another writer, this could have easily turned into an emo-estic story for either of the characters with big speeches about either memory and "poor me, I am an immortal" or "You don't put enough effort in, you don't love me." and a miraculous fixing of the problem with cock. (Or at least an enough distraction to forestall the conversation for another day.)
Instead you kept the prickly conversation interspersed with the game, which is most realistic when you are pissed off with your partner about something and I love Jack's comment "you are fucking an ex-time agent". Took about an excellent reality check. Your writing of Ianto feels very much like a COE and Maggot background Ianto in his desire to "fit in" with the normalcy of a rugby game and his thought/speech patterns.
I enjoy how in all of the sharing spaces cluster, you write Ianto as an equal in the relationship with it deep enough to not need verbal reassurance of whether they love each other (which really? With their backgrounds?) but Ianto demanding more of an effort on something he cares about-wearing the damn shirt.
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With another writer, this could have easily turned into an emo-estic story for either of the characters with big speeches about either memory and "poor me, I am an immortal" or "You don't put enough effort in, you don't love me." and a miraculous fixing of the problem with cock. (Or at least an enough distraction to forestall the conversation for another day.)
Instead you kept the prickly conversation interspersed with the game, which is most realistic when you are pissed off with your partner about something and I love Jack's comment "you are fucking an ex-time agent". Took about an excellent reality check. Your writing of Ianto feels very much like a COE and Maggot background Ianto in his desire to "fit in" with the normalcy of a rugby game and his thought/speech patterns.
I enjoy how in all of the sharing spaces cluster, you write Ianto as an equal in the relationship with it deep enough to not need verbal reassurance of whether they love each other (which really? With their backgrounds?) but Ianto demanding more of an effort on something he cares about-wearing the damn shirt.
*blushes* Sorry for the long comment.