The first time I read it, two days ago, I wasn't impressed, mainly because I don't think the metal exoskeleton would make penetration, between her legs, possible. That pulled me out of the story, so I just skimmed through the rest.
I reread it; ignored my thoughts on anatomical details, which turned out to be a good decision, and focused on Ianto's inner conflict, that you conveyed in a few sentences. Is he (ab)using her or does she really want it?
Normally authors use metal (its sounds, smells, etc.) as a metaphor for Ianto's emotional state to emphasise how sick it makes him, seeing Lisa like this. If he touches her at all, they'll let him search for the parts of her that still feel organic. I like how you twisted this into an equally disturbing and kinky scenario. While metal kink is one of my favourite kinks, it is, by default, difficult to pull off in the Torchwood fandom, for obvious reasons. You make it work. So, in a nutshell: dark, hot and Ianto's controversial/uncomfortable characterisation make for very good fic.
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Date: 2009-01-29 06:59 pm (UTC)I reread it; ignored my thoughts on anatomical details, which turned out to be a good decision, and focused on Ianto's inner conflict, that you conveyed in a few sentences. Is he (ab)using her or does she really want it?
Normally authors use metal (its sounds, smells, etc.) as a metaphor for Ianto's emotional state to emphasise how sick it makes him, seeing Lisa like this. If he touches her at all, they'll let him search for the parts of her that still feel organic. I like how you twisted this into an equally disturbing and kinky scenario. While metal kink is one of my favourite kinks, it is, by default, difficult to pull off in the Torchwood fandom, for obvious reasons. You make it work.
So, in a nutshell: dark, hot and Ianto's controversial/uncomfortable characterisation make for very good fic.